In response to the piece of writing:
It is indeed a very well written piece of writing. The first paragraph sets the scene vividly, and the following paragraph clearly defines the two "examples" used to display its moral, and brings the setting to life with the mulling of the atheist. The following dialogue is parallel structured in a way that helps the reader clearly understand the point made by contrasting the two human characters by how there responses differ. Thus, even though the writing is short the reader is given the illusion of two fully fleshed out lives.
Thematically the piece is very clever. By setting up the Christian male as someone many Christians can relate to the shock of God discarding him hits home very strongly. He is portrayed with all of the qualities commonly accepted as "good" by many Christians. Thus when he is judged to God's disfavor it causes the Christian reader to either question his or her own values and think deeper about the meaning of the piece (or shut down and stop listening).
The climax is also very powerful, as well as emotionally satisfying, as the atheist chooses to stand for her own beliefs instead of God's, and renounces him as fit to judge. The manner in which the author portrays this is very satisfying to both the intellect and emotion of like minded readers, thus reaffirming their beliefs. It also shows the strength of Atheism to those who are not atheist, which helps convey the meaning even better.
All in all a well written piece.
In response to the debate afterwards:
Omniscience is not Omnipotence, though the God of Christians does claim both. Omniscience is all knowing, and Omnipotence is being able to do everything.
In regards to how God could not be responsible for everyone sinning even though he created them the distinction of those two words becomes important.
Yes God is omnipotent, therefore he could force you to sin (or not sin). However to be truly omnipotent one would also have the ability to restrain and control one's power, thus he would also have the power to not control ones actions, and whether or not he did would be his choice.
However in that case he would still "know" being Omniscient that what he created and gave free will to would sin, therefore, man being his creations and him knowing what would happen, he would be responsible for what man did. However I think that one way to look at this apparent hypocrisy would be to consider your own memory. You know what someone did in the past, but are you responsible for what others do in your memory. Yes before God created the Universe he knew what was going to happen, however it is far from predetermined. Being outside of time itself, He remembers it before it happens. Just because God knows what happens doesn't mean you still don't have to make it happen. Along the lines of what §outh§tar said, you do it, he just remembers it before you have.
Now comes the tricky part, why free will in the first place? Why would God decide to allow his creations to do "evil" if he despises it? Of course if he hadn't we wouldn't be allowed to question his judgment on the topic in the first place, but wouldn't indeed prove him not fully sane, and therefore not fit to judge? (Of-course if God couldn't tell right from wrong it'd be very strange for one his creations to be able to do so, so therefore he didn't create us, he isn't omnipotent, or we are missing something.)
Answering that question seems to be the heart of the theme of this story. What God would make such a decision that seems so obviously stupid? The easy answer out is to say no such God ever made that decision, because that God didn't exist. On the other side, one could say, God is great beyond our understanding and that is why we cannot fathom why he would make such a choice. Well I'll tell you that either person who falls directly on either of those answers is no better than the other. Yes saying there isn't a God would be the easy way out, therefore I challenge you to do better. Saying that God is unfathomable is just as simple, and in the same way I challenge you.
I think that rather than assuming you either know the answer or don't, you should consider what the answer might be. I myself am seeking the answer to the question, and think that perhaps the answers lies in the question itself. Could not the answer be that a God who gives us free will and philosophizing minds gave them to us in order to discover why he chose to give them to us. To seek the knowledge of the truth, rather than accept or discount it out of hand might the purpose.
I don't know if I'm on the right track at all, but I think that it would be close-minded and silly to just assume there isn’t a God because this thing is hard to understand, or assume that it is beyond understand for the same reason. That is my two and half (and probably a few to many more) cents.