give me feedback later, and ill write more (those above were ones i had written earlier this week)
A Poem Thread
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It's not that hard. Here, I try.Mr.Jack4WAR said:
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With a kiss on a corpse,
with a sword on ones lips
a whisper resurrects
memories killed by tears
and years, and years, and years.
With a shout from a grave
the lost grale shatters and falls
spilling the blood of gods
on the lips which were silent
for years and years, and years.
It takes just a word to trigger a war,
and just a sound to envision a song,
a little smile to make you alive
and a cry to leave everything and die.
thats good.. u got good metephoric expressions... but ur song sounds like a deep depression emo kid
Here I sit broken hearted,
Tried to shit but only farted!
Tried to shit but only farted!
here i am on the pot,
waiting to hear that "ker-plop,
ALL OF A SUDDEN i look over my shoulder,
and notice THERES NOTHING ON THE TOILET PAPER HOLDER!
so here i am...i now have to linger,
omg, am i gunna have to use my finger?!
--me--random thought, actually made up while on the pot---
waiting to hear that "ker-plop,
ALL OF A SUDDEN i look over my shoulder,
and notice THERES NOTHING ON THE TOILET PAPER HOLDER!
so here i am...i now have to linger,
omg, am i gunna have to use my finger?!
--me--random thought, actually made up while on the pot---
Here's some stuff I've wrote over the past year or so...
Sad Girl
They said she was ugly, they said she was wierd
She acted fine, though inside her were tears.
Her parents made jokes, never to understand,
So then she decided, to devise a plan.
The next day, she brough a gun.
Cocked it. And have some fun.
All blood-filled and gorey
Never to understand, this sad girl's story
The Love Of Pain
As I slit my wrists, I love the pain
Starting to cut in, straight into the vein.
My wrist, covered full of blood red mixtures,
Let me savor this moment, by taking pictures.
Cut my head off, feeling the pain of death,
As I die gasping, with one final breath.
Now! Just end it! Let me die.
If its painful, let me feel it. Bye!
Suicide
Suicide is not painful, its bliss.
Would you care to kiss, the deceased's lips?
Are you afraid of death?
Because its not afraid of you.
Death just happens,
It will proceed and continue.
Suicide is not much different from death as you can tell,
The only difference is that you do it yourself.
Blood.
Gore.
Skin.
More.
Feel the knife to your neck, put that gun to your chest
I realize I may have influenced you,
But if you commit suicide, who did you commit it too?
I have commited suicide at least 1000 times,
Well my soul has. But my body seems fine.
If you now want to commit suicide, realize that it is your choice
I didn't force you,
I just gave the dead a voice!
All of these Copyright 2004 by me
Please give me feedback about these whether on this thread, or a private message. Thanks for reading!!
Sad Girl
They said she was ugly, they said she was wierd
She acted fine, though inside her were tears.
Her parents made jokes, never to understand,
So then she decided, to devise a plan.
The next day, she brough a gun.
Cocked it. And have some fun.
All blood-filled and gorey
Never to understand, this sad girl's story
The Love Of Pain
As I slit my wrists, I love the pain
Starting to cut in, straight into the vein.
My wrist, covered full of blood red mixtures,
Let me savor this moment, by taking pictures.
Cut my head off, feeling the pain of death,
As I die gasping, with one final breath.
Now! Just end it! Let me die.
If its painful, let me feel it. Bye!
Suicide
Suicide is not painful, its bliss.
Would you care to kiss, the deceased's lips?
Are you afraid of death?
Because its not afraid of you.
Death just happens,
It will proceed and continue.
Suicide is not much different from death as you can tell,
The only difference is that you do it yourself.
Blood.
Gore.
Skin.
More.
Feel the knife to your neck, put that gun to your chest
I realize I may have influenced you,
But if you commit suicide, who did you commit it too?
I have commited suicide at least 1000 times,
Well my soul has. But my body seems fine.
If you now want to commit suicide, realize that it is your choice
I didn't force you,
I just gave the dead a voice!
All of these Copyright 2004 by me
Please give me feedback about these whether on this thread, or a private message. Thanks for reading!!
^^^damn u need issues seriously bro
Mr.Jack4WAR said:
You do realize I like to speak of what other fear to think about. I dont believe in suicide (WAY to painful) killing another human being is plain evil. and even cutting myself would hurt WAY to bad. I just like people to think I actually think about this stuff. And the Sad Girl's Story was about a news thing. I wrote that a while back. I think I heard someone on the news about a kid bringing a gun to school, and I just went from there. Although I do have issues, so thanks for noticing
haha ait bro
wen ever i get pissed off i transfer it into lyrics.... it really does help depending on how deep they r
hhaha i like stabbing my heart...couhg...its funny to see the blood rush up in tiny spurts................jk
a spec i dont even pay attention 2
a part of me i threw away w/out looking back
so ready to get it out, ready to destroy it
shouldnt even be wasting time on that lousy spec
i can look on and move on, clean my past, & leave that spec with the dirt it deserves..
SHES nothing to me, i shouldnt even waste my time by brushing her off
shes bak in the un-respected dirt..for good---CJ
a part of me i threw away w/out looking back
so ready to get it out, ready to destroy it
shouldnt even be wasting time on that lousy spec
i can look on and move on, clean my past, & leave that spec with the dirt it deserves..
SHES nothing to me, i shouldnt even waste my time by brushing her off
shes bak in the un-respected dirt..for good---CJ
Oh, how great, nowadays poems get written in chatroom-writing style... I do not think I like it that much, sounds like a cheap rap song.