Shallow

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Increan

Sage
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Shallow

Never seeing, Never being
Never knowing, Never growing
Always the same, Cannot be blamed

Taking kindness for granted
Abusing the power of beauty
Completely oblivious to whats going on

Only you exist in your world
Condemed to be unhappy
But still not understanding

Selfish is the path you take
Underestimating the competition
Losing before its begun

Focusing on self-image
Look how superficial your life has become
Should have made friends instead of copies

No one is there in your times of need
Is anyone good enough?
Does anyone measure-up?

Destined to be alone
Unable to comprehend the error of your ways


S.G.




Not my best work, but I decided to post it anyways
 
Not as good as the rest, I think it needs a bit more - depth - but the alliteration here:

Never seeing, Never being
Never knowing, Never growing

Is utterly and completely fucking brilliant!
 
Originally posted by BloodSuckingGerbile
Cool, dude!
You rule!

Mind if I write a melody?

I think it will sound great with some heavy metal riffs.
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Be my guest. I like to here it put to music.
 
Originally posted by Aussie
great work - all of them. very subtle, yet capturing.
ever had any published??
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Thank You, and no I have not had any published but was thinking of trying.
 
Originally posted by BloodSuckingGerbile


What's your best work?
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That's a matter of opinion, check out the links to the others in an above post and decide for yourself.
 
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